When I see the sea
When I dive into the sea
The sea makes me feel happy
The sea makes me excited
I will see all
All beauty
All nature in the sea
The sea is for me to learn
The sea is for me to teach
The sea is for me to live
The sea is my dreamland
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I like your poem "the sea...".It's a beautiful sea that I never see.And i like the sky that's sunshine.
I loves sea and I think it is a beautiful picture. Is it in Japan? I think It will be a nice poem if you could describe more detail about that sea, explore what you see during diving (colorful fishes, colorful corals, original nature, unpolluted sea), what you hear (people laughing), how about the view of the sea (the blue crystal water like a emerald diamond, beautiful sunset), what people did (some people are diving, ridding a jet sky, snorkeling, children swimming)? Anything that could make your poem more attractive, more informative. So, the audience can understand what you learned about from the sea, what the sea taught you.
I like it because your poem is simple and clean.
By the way, where are you in the picture? I don't determine who you are.
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